06-17-2009, 01:25 PM
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مشرفة السرد و إبداعات بلغة أخرى
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كاتب الموضوع :
ايمان محضار
المنتدى :
إبداعات بلغات أخرى
| اقتباس :
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة ايمان محضار
[ مشاهدة المشاركة ]
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When it gets dark keep me near
When I’m afraid do no let me go daddy
I can always get away from home
I can get lost
I might be a bad person
People will hate me
Yeah daddy they will
But what I’m sure that you will never hate me
You won’t let me down
It’s you daddy by my side
When all my dreams fade away
When I shed tears
You know how to cut down on my pains
Daddy I miss these days
You used to say to me nice things
You have always said to me that I’m beautiful rose that is blooming
You have always made me believe that life is just great
Telling me nice stories about princesses and that beautiful unreal world
Believe me daddy I did grow up yes but I didn’t forget a word
Your stories, your imagination that urges me everyday to go on
Daddy I’m still keeping everything
But daddy I feel like I’m not your beautiful daughter
Anyway was I really the most beautiful daughter?
Anyway you made me feel like I’m really
So just thank you for everything you did to me
You made me so happy
And still wish if I could be your little sweet daughter again
I still wish
I’m still dreaming about the gleaming shiny sun
I’m still watching the beautiful stars that shine brightly
I still believe in your dreams
And as for your dreams don’t worry they are in safe with me
It’s an honor to do make your dream come true
Yeah daddy I will make you proud
Your little dreamer daughter
Yes daddy you are the one who
Makes me wanna dream
with my love hope u like it and enjoy it
it's just a simple poem with simple words
but i guess it's really deep one and sepecial one just because it's about daddy
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what I’m sure that : what I'm sure of is that
You used to say to me nice things: you used to tell me
funreal world: fairy-tale world
Believe me daddy I did grow up yes but I didn’t forget a word: I'm grown up, yes but I haven't gorgotten
your imagination that urges me everyday to go on: time is the last thing to occur in a sentence. Otherwise at the very beginning, but never in the middle.
Anyway you made me feel like I’m really: You should do without the adverb 'really' here
So just thank you for everything you did to me: for me
And still wish if I could be : no 'if' after I wish: no 'if'
It’s an honor to do make your dream come true: the emphasizing 'do' is unnecessary here
Your little dreamer daughter: dreaming
Makes me wanna dream
like it and enjoy it
u like: this is instant messagery way of writing 'you. So, it's not appropriate here
it's just a simple poem with simple words: in
but i guess it's really deep one and sepecial one: 'i': same problem (IM) writing
it's really deep one: a deep one
yes, daddy should be proud of you
Good luck
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